Your thesis draft sounds only like a claim. You need to put that idea into context of the quote and your life.
The quote has taught me that rules....
The idea that "rules can enforce someone" is illogical as is--inaccurate. People who make rules can enforce them, but rules aren't people. They can't enforce, but can be enforced.
"it" is singular, while "Rules" are plural. You cannot use a pronoun that doesn't agree in number with the antecedent (the noun it is referring to).
You also at "to be" into the sentence, which messes up meaning, too.
After editing, the issue still remains as to how the quote is important to your life. Do you live life less by others' rules? How does the quote impact your own ideology or day to day behavior? When you come across rules, what do you do?
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ReplyDeleteYour thesis draft sounds only like a claim. You need to put that idea into context of the quote and your life.
The quote has taught me that rules....
The idea that "rules can enforce someone" is illogical as is--inaccurate. People who make rules can enforce them, but rules aren't people. They can't enforce, but can be enforced.
"it" is singular, while "Rules" are plural. You cannot use a pronoun that doesn't agree in number with the antecedent (the noun it is referring to).
You also at "to be" into the sentence, which messes up meaning, too.
After editing, the issue still remains as to how the quote is important to your life. Do you live life less by others' rules? How does the quote impact your own ideology or day to day behavior? When you come across rules, what do you do?